Inside the mind of a fantasy writer

Friday Fictioneers: The Sentinel

At Rich’s request, I joined in on another Friday Fictioneers.  If you want to be a team player, join in on the fun HERE.

I’d dare you but you don’t have anything I want.  Hmm…or do you???  Sniff sniff.  Is that-….oh nevermind.  It’s not.  Bummer.

Copyright-Janet Webb

The Sentinel

The storm.

Countless lives were swept away by the beast’s rampage, children taken from their mothers by it’s strong hands.

But I took shelter here and the sentinel protected me.

I now sit inside it listening to it’s words as the strong wind breathes life into them, the creaks and moans like a lullaby that can calm any fear.

The light streams down from holes in it’s battered frame revealing the shimmering angels that live here. They have not been swept away, in death they have also found solace here.  To the ones they love most they will always be invisible but I see them.  I listen.  And like them I will always remember-

The sentinel.

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28 responses

  1. I’ve read several of these today and a lot have featured mean or spiteful ghosts. I like your kind better. Well done, Heidi.

    February 21, 2013 at 5:02 pm

    • Thanks, I’m glad you liked it.

      February 21, 2013 at 7:20 pm

  2. I really enjoyed this.

    February 21, 2013 at 5:20 pm

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 21, 2013 at 7:21 pm

  3. They’ll have life through her remembering.

    (BTW, no apostrophe in “its” when it doesn’t mean “it is.”)

    janet

    February 21, 2013 at 6:01 pm

    • Thanks, I always forget that.

      February 21, 2013 at 7:21 pm

      • well go fix it then!

        February 22, 2013 at 3:51 pm

        • I think I’ll leave it just to annoy you 😉

          February 23, 2013 at 9:26 am

          • oh. what. a. surprise.

            February 23, 2013 at 12:50 pm

  4. Beautiful!! ❤

    February 21, 2013 at 7:04 pm

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 21, 2013 at 7:20 pm

  5. Nice touch with liking the ghost. I’m sure the ghost have plenty to share. Nicely done.

    February 21, 2013 at 10:08 pm

    • It would be awesome if we could hear what one would say and there’s much we could learn from them.

      February 22, 2013 at 5:06 am

  6. good stuff — that’s the beginning of the kind of storiy I favor. I liked it quite a bit.

    February 21, 2013 at 10:15 pm

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 22, 2013 at 5:06 am

  7. yes, spooky but a more benevolent spooky. somber. like heads lower in recognition of something more powerful. well done.

    February 22, 2013 at 3:52 pm

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 23, 2013 at 9:27 am

  8. Very interesting take here…I could not write it as I don’t have that kind of imagination, but you did very well! Loved the sentence with “streaming light”.

    February 22, 2013 at 4:41 pm

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 23, 2013 at 9:28 am

  9. This is a nice scary story. One point though, I think perhaps a comma after “battered frame” would give more emphasis to ” revealing the shimmering angels that live here.”
    which is a great line.
    Good take on the prompt, I enjoyed reading.
    Dee

    February 23, 2013 at 9:32 am

    • Thanks for the suggestion 🙂

      February 24, 2013 at 9:55 am

  10. Another great story.

    February 24, 2013 at 11:19 am

    • Thanks 🙂

      February 24, 2013 at 5:17 pm

  11. Spooky in a very good and comforting way. … Maybe there’s an eerie followup.

    February 24, 2013 at 1:08 pm

    • No follow up yet 🙂

      February 24, 2013 at 5:17 pm

  12. abraham

    “To the ones they love most they will always be invisible” isn’t that sad?

    February 25, 2013 at 7:51 am

  13. I’m not sure if you are new to the fictioneers, but I have not read your work before, so welcome. You have a great way of telling a story.

    February 25, 2013 at 10:58 am

    • Thanks for the welcome 😉 I’ve only done a few so I guess I am slightly new.

      February 25, 2013 at 1:47 pm

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