Friday Fictioneers: The Lights

At a friend’s suggestion I’m trying something new and participating in the Friday Fictioneers.  I will try it out once and see how it goes.  It gives me a break from working on a new story-or several (I’m bouncing between three right now)

So here’s the picture and my 100 word short inspired by it.  It was hard getting it exactly 100 words and not rambling like I am good at.  Hmm…I guess I’ll give it a title of The Lights.


An empty street full of strangers

They smile at you but don’t mean it

Buying gifts to buy each other’s love

Thinking it can make up for a year’s worth of neglect

The lights strung across the sky mask the truth

Making us give into the illusion

Until their bright colors fade and we are left with reality

I miss the way the lights illuminated your smile

The way the cold flushed your cheeks

Bright packaging that made you sparkle

The façade making me love you

The darkness holding the truth

Despite their kiss of ice

I miss the lights



37 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers: The Lights

    • I’ve seen so many people act like that at the holidays and all the glitter and presents seem to change the real meaning of them sometimes. A little sad

  1. I am going to look that up…friday fictioneers, I mean. You came up with a really nice piece, kid. You will probably find ff a good exercise for fine-tuning your other work, as well as a challenging form to work in in itself. Go for it. You are doing fine.

  2. Nice job. Sad to think that we only celebrate with this kind of love at Christmas. But then again, we see giving people all the time – to victims of Sandy, Joplin, etc. Maybe all is not as bad as it seems.

    • As with people there are always good and bad. Hopefully there are enough good people as you have mentioned to keep the holidays joyous. Thanks for commenting.

  3. HI Heidi,
    Welcome to the party. Love that photo of you. Nicely chosen words. At first I thought your character was just a Chrismas cynic, and I could really relate, but you took it to another level by revealing how she arrived at her conclusions. Very well done. Please come back again. Ron

  4. You caught the flaws of our plastic society so well – there is something absurd about the tunes and smiles and forced gaiety. But your last line was poetry. Almost whispered, and tucked into the corner. Very nice indeed.

  5. Very nicely done. Don’t know how I missed this earlier. Love the idea of buying gifts to buy someone’s love. Never quite works out that way, does it?

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